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Post by Damian Simmons on Jul 26, 2017 23:23:28 GMT -5
Hey. I had inspiration for a new roleplay earlier, so I wrote it. In my opinion, I love it. I know, I know, I'm supposed to write what I like. But I'm mainly asking if there's anything I'm missing. Like, is it clear that I'm talking down to my opponent? I mean, I can pick up on that aspect pretty clearly, but that's because I wrote it. I wanna make sure it's clear to the reader. And, overall, I would like to hear if this was humorous to you. I wrote what made me laugh, but I have a fairly outlandish sense of humor. wcfwrestling.proboards.com/thread/35384/simmons-storytime-young-matthews-turmoil
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Post by Logan on Jul 26, 2017 23:43:48 GMT -5
I would suggest adding the children into the scene that he is reading to and their reactions to his story as well. Also a bit more emotion and showmanship, since it's being told through a children's story, perhaps throw in a dragon or a knight or something off the path - to fantasize it up a bit.
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Post by Damian Simmons on Jul 27, 2017 0:04:59 GMT -5
Well, it was mostly intended to be a skit. The "children" were the readers. Maybe I should make that more clear?
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