Post by Odin Balfore on Dec 11, 2011 21:05:16 GMT -5
Blade LaVinge
RP - Debut of Something New
Event Slam! 12/11/11
Match - Nathan von Liebert vs Blade LaVigne vs Dalton Henry
PRO's
~ Good IN - Character shoot.
~ Good over all length
~ Easy to read / navigate
CON's
~ Lack of match related shoot
~ Lack of Character Delevopment ( debut RP? )
~ Time limit constraints
THOUGHTS
Over allm it was a good read. Personally I didn't think it to be spectacular. We all know that Debuts can be very difficult so I'm not going to fault you too much there but again, you didn't give us much about Blade. I would have liked to have heard more about Blade the character like you were saying at the top of the RP. I was very much intrested until you got to your match shoot then well, debuts suck.
I don't know if you had personal things going on that made you over look your opponents other then the " fugly " part but there wasn't much there other then:
" I'm going to win because I'm going to win"
We all have matches, weeks, months like that where you just get flat lined creatively an I know your opponents didnt give you much but NVL RP'd. Definatly would have liked to seen more shoot an in depth shoot of your opponents to hammer out your very nice looking RP.
NOTES
I think you know where you fumbled a bit with out me having to feed back it so I'm not really going to give you notes to improve upon besides really get into that match shoot. You started to dig into Odin but it fell kinda flat.
Rating.
2.5 out of 5.
I can tell you can do better then that RP. get your feet wet and get swimming.
