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Post by Poseidon on Mar 1, 2011 19:16:00 GMT -5
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Post by Jason Cashe on Mar 1, 2011 22:14:02 GMT -5
Being that you're new to WCF I wouldn't expect you to do much of it but at least for me, Trash talking is the first thing I noticed in someone's rp. How well they are informed of their opponent shows the true dedication in wanting to win the match. Making up shit for the Trash Talking without the homework being done makes for less than stellar stuff. With that said I would like to see more of trash talking in your promos but again, fully understandable as right now you are getting to know the crew.
You could also and again this is just my own self judgment but you could put 3-5 sentences per paragraph, that way it doesn't look like you are stretching out a lesser length promo. You have at times only 2 sentences and at other times 3-4 which work but just gives it a stretched out feel for me. I like the writing though, story is there, giving people something to go on is there and I think the other stuff I mentioned will come as you come to know the roster more so everything seems to be right on track for you. B+
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Shane Borderland
Mid-Carder
"I Will Overcome Anything, To Achieve EVERYTHING!"
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Post by Shane Borderland on Mar 1, 2011 23:48:11 GMT -5
awww, such a good teacher there Mr. Kash, lol, jk bro, yea im wit Kash, youll be fine when u get to know the roster better.
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Post by Poseidon on Mar 2, 2011 1:31:24 GMT -5
Hey thanks Kash, and Borderland for the feedback, will return the favor, but I too think once I get to know everyone my promo's will improve, as for the story part or character developmental part of "Poseidon" I'll be incorperating that into my rps more and more.
Poseidon who's real name is Damien Dellacroce I'll be like I said building onto his story, giving away stuff as to why he think's like he does, how he ticks, and why he does the thinks he does, I haven't even begin to touch on his past yet, the two Rps that I've done are just begining peices which shall tie into his past and like i said up above will tie into those things as well.
But thanks again for the feedback, much appreciated and will be returned.
- James.
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Post by Poseidon on Mar 2, 2011 13:16:14 GMT -5
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Post by Jason Cashe on Mar 2, 2011 13:34:53 GMT -5
Yeah much better on the 3rd man. I liked the straight shooter type shit so you good.
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Post by Poseidon on Mar 2, 2011 13:41:39 GMT -5
Thanks kash.
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