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Post by Donald Deruty on Jan 24, 2011 20:24:31 GMT -5
Well the subject says it all, i would really love and i do love to get feedback. I always try to make myself better by incorperating peoples suggestions, so if you want to comment, insult, or whatever you think i can do better let your thoughts be heard!
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Post by Johnny Reb on Jan 25, 2011 10:09:06 GMT -5
Overall, your RP was pretty good. The content went a long way toward highlighting your character's personal code of ethics/behavior.
The only thing that stands out is the dialogue... It seemed a little bit forced and unnatural. (Then again, that happens to everybody sometimes...) I don't really know that there's a way to fix something like that, other than time and practice.
Unless, of course, it was your intention to kind of come off as a little bit surreal. In which case, please disregard previous comments.
I liked the RP, though. You've definitely come a long way since those early days. ;D
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Post by Donald Deruty on Jan 25, 2011 19:04:01 GMT -5
Reb thank you for those nice comments and yeah it started out ok with the bank thing and then it just got a little bit too crazy! But hey thanks for the feedback!
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