Vacation Pay-Off (The Feedback)

[Allen Guiliano]

Was solid for a debut RP so to speak. I know you did one before as kind of an introduction and I read that one as well and thought it was good. It does feel a "bit rusty" as you said, but that will clear up as you get back into the game.

I think it was good and quite bearable, HOWEVER, a few things I would change is the colors you are using. The "brown" and the "green" seem to blend together a little bit and I had to stop and figure out who was actually speaking on a couple of occasions. Like you said, it was a little tired, but that will get better as you learn your opponents and get familiar with the WCF. I know it took me a good three or four weeks to get back in full form.

All in all, I thought it was pretty good and hope I didn't discourage too much with my criticism. Welcome to the WCF and I think you will find it quite enjoyable here.

[Seth]

Actually, I thought the exact opposite of Slickie T in that I really like the color scheme. He's right in that the colors might run together a little bit but I think overall they work together well. So I dunno!

Very well written, interesting read, not too long and not too short. Great job.

[Allen Guiliano]

Not saying I don't like the color scheme, I do, just was sometimes hard to tell who the actual speaker was. I assume that the colors go with the "cash" part of your name as it seems the green resembles the color of money, or am I just being dumb?

[Deleted]

Defiantly thought it was a solid RP for your Slam debut and look forward to reading some more of your work. As for the color scheme...well I can't really talk too much on that seeing as how my last RP used every color available, but I do like how you used colors to go along with your characters gimmick. All in all, nicely done.