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Post by Hot Johnny Hott on Sept 14, 2009 9:24:18 GMT -5
Hey, posted my first roleplay, and would love feedback, and help. I swear I used to do this a lot and was pretty good but it has been awhile and I believe after posting I tried to do too much with one, but still.
Hey, thanks guys.
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Post by Seth on Sept 14, 2009 15:49:23 GMT -5
Same feedback I usually give for guys that don't do it.. I really recommend using color. Makes the whole thing much more easy to read.
As for the writing, a good start, you definitely have a direction you're going so thats exciting. Made me interested in the character and thats what you're going for at this point, so good call.
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