The Return

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I need opinions on my latest. I feel that I don't have enough "action" in my promos. I try to at first but then I get so into what my character is saying that next thing I know I have like 5 paragraphs of straight talk.

In case anyone is confused on what I mean by action, I mean "Gravedigger walks across the room and looks out the window" type action.

[Torture]

Well you don't need it. My view on your character is that he's a straight talker anyway. He'd rather talk then do a lot of movements and/or walk across a room. He's a business man, and sometimes he's all business.

My .02