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Post by Deleted on May 19, 2018 20:03:01 GMT -5
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Post by Kid Dynamo on May 19, 2018 23:09:55 GMT -5
Three things I liked:
1. I don’t know if that’s your plan going forward, but I think a female version of “oldtimer proving he’s still got it” has legs, especially because of the gender-based double standard (no one is calling a 36-year-old man to old to hack it). I imagined after your promo the radio DJ being like “are you sure you can handle this? You’ve been wrestling a long time...” and you just laying into him and getting thrown out of the booth. I think that’s badass (and the fact that there are forums wishing WWE would give Mickie James more run at age 42 tells me I’m not the only one). 2. “That happened one time”. I could see this being a running gag. Like everything from falling asleep to Netflix to hooking up with the pizza guy to butt-dialing grandma at midnight. Just a thought. It made me laugh. 3. I mentioned before how in a good interaction, one person/group has to represent “normal” and the other “abnormal”. To that effect, Lilly and Coco’s reluctance to trust Jezebel (bonus points for giving her literally the most untrustworthy name possible) amplified that whatever Kylie was planning was extreme, and that was exactly the right note to hit.
Three things I didn’t like:
1. I feel like you overacknowledged the losing streak early on. As a fan, I need to know that you almost beat the World Champ, but I don’t need to know that you’ve been losing a lot. 2. #PersonalOpinion Naming real-life personalities is gonna make my didn’t like half of the ledger every time. I get where you were going, but instead of comparing him to Arn, just call him out for what he is, a guy who thinks that just because he’s tough and can throw a punch that he’s a great wrestler, and a brawler will never be able to get it done against a great wrestler. 3. Forgive me if I missed this from earlier RPs but it felt like Jezebel got no introduction to explain why her help was such a crazy thing for Kylie to enlist. There needs to be a scene that explains what brought them together and hints at who Jezebel is, and as an obvious sucker for achronology, I assure you it isn’t too late to flashback and cover that ground, possibly even little by little as you inch along the present day storyline alongside it.
Bottom Line: Kylie Moore has “female Daniel Bryan” potential.
I think a 5000-word RP that fed off this RP and maintained the quality I saw here absolutely could beat anyone on this roster including “YA BOI”. Like I told Vincent, I think the best thing you could do moving forward is decide what about Kylie and your story is special and unique and take them as far as you can.
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