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Post by Odin Balfore on Apr 25, 2018 17:29:14 GMT -5
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Post by Vincent Augustine on Apr 25, 2018 21:33:56 GMT -5
Where do I begin? It was...ok. Blue on a black background made it kind of hard to read especially with some of the walls of text. Part of me wants to dive in deep but the reality is this is nothing more than a shoot roleplay that takes place at a few different locations over an undetermined amount of time. This isn't necessarily bad, but the shoot to me wasn't all that strong, you made some good points, had some kind of funny moments, but they were in my opinion drowned out by some repetitive statements, and some just kind of useless information. I get that Odin likes to push Singh's shit in, but the reference though meant to be funny falls short when it is stated no less than five times through out the roleplay.
The settings though moderately well described were still nothing more than a back drop for a guy to stand out of natural position and simply run his mouth at length, at times seemingly getting lost in his own words and having to circle back to the point that was originally the destination. It is clear that Odin hates Singh, and thinks highly of himself, hell he is a God or some shit, but the misuse of the idea and concept of what Ragnarok is drives me maddeningly crazy and insane.
Too sum this up, and not get too into detail, I would say the RP is average, maybe slightly above.
Odin is a badass - we get it, but you should make me believe it don't just say it Odin hates Singh - we get it, but you should make me understand how much Odin pushes Singh's shit in - we get it, ever heard the joke is old? It was after the first time you said it.
Say something, do something that hasn't already been done. When every Roleplay I read says the same thing, does the same thing, it loses all originality, and makes them all just become median.
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Post by Dionysus on Apr 26, 2018 23:58:20 GMT -5
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Yeah, it’s pretty good.
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Post by Odin Balfore on Apr 27, 2018 20:40:29 GMT -5
To ur points.
1. Odin litteraly caused an end times scinario over the wcf world title
1a. Choke slamed singh off the catwalk of a arena
2. See above. This is a 5 month long blood feud at this point.
3. Ive won tag titles with that exact shoot and a lesser titles with just 5 letters and a vowel.
So in the ONLY MAJOR STORY LINE IN WCF... Yes, its been said that odin is a badass and why he hates singh...
If this a 1 off match, ur points are fine but for a 5 month long feud at its all pretty much stated leading up to this. I dont feel i need elaborate story... we're all ready there. Now its time for hurting Bombs. If u dont like my shoot, fair points but ur gripes ignore the past 5 months of story.
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Post by John Cross on Apr 27, 2018 21:27:28 GMT -5
To ur points. 1. Odin litteraly caused an end times scinario over the wcf world title 1a. Choke slamed singh off the catwalk of a arena 2. See above. This is a 5 month long blood feud at this point. 3. Ive won tag titles with that exact shoot and a lesser titles with just 5 letters and a vowel. So in the ONLY MAJOR STORY LINE IN WCF... Yes, its been said that odin is a badass and why he hates singh... If this a 1 off match, ur points are fine but for a 5 month long feud at its all pretty much stated leading up to this. I dont feel i need elaborate story... we're all ready there. Now its time for hurting Bombs. If u dont like my shoot, fair points but ur gripes ignore the past 5 months of story. You seem a little touchy and defensive for a guy who asked for promo tips. I think he gave a pretty honest assessment. I read the whole thing through, and while I thought it went a bit long, I generally thought it was well written. I didn't really understand the change in voice there between he earlier part and the later part, but I'm not too familiar with the character. I'm also not too familiar with how this place works, as I'm not sure how a world ending event could come from a title match. Maybe I need to read up on that.
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Post by "Invincible" Damian Kaine on Apr 29, 2018 22:23:39 GMT -5
To ur points. 1. Odin litteraly caused an end times scinario over the wcf world title 1a. Choke slamed singh off the catwalk of a arena 2. See above. This is a 5 month long blood feud at this point. 3. Ive won tag titles with that exact shoot and a lesser titles with just 5 letters and a vowel. So in the ONLY MAJOR STORY LINE IN WCF... Yes, its been said that odin is a badass and why he hates singh... If this a 1 off match, ur points are fine but for a 5 month long feud at its all pretty much stated leading up to this. I dont feel i need elaborate story... we're all ready there. Now its time for hurting Bombs. If u dont like my shoot, fair points but ur gripes ignore the past 5 months of story. Kill 'em, Odin. Kill 'em all.
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Post by TheMythKilla on Apr 30, 2018 9:32:24 GMT -5
If you can't handle feedback...don't ask for it
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Post by Teo Blaze on Apr 30, 2018 11:51:43 GMT -5
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