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Post by Cliff of Doom on Sept 18, 2016 7:02:15 GMT -5
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Post by Thomas Uriel Bates on Sept 18, 2016 10:44:16 GMT -5
I am loving your teacher side story. I did feel it lacked a real "shoot", but you did at least "think" about your opponent. Great writing though.
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Post by Oath Breaker on Sept 18, 2016 11:11:21 GMT -5
Top notch man. Missed a spot with the color coding, but with how much is there to go through, it would be hard to get it all. Loved how you sold your previous match as well as confirming the true ability of upcoming confrontation. Storyline is great, trying to balance wrestling, teaching, and at home life and still thinking he can do all three even though it hasn't worked so great so far. Be interesting to see how he can fix it, and fuck it up again.
One of the best reads in the promo board in weeks.
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Post by Cliff of Doom on Sept 18, 2016 12:33:46 GMT -5
I am loving your teacher side story. I did feel it lacked a real "shoot", but you did at least "think" about your opponent. Great writing though. Thank you. The shooting was real hard this week, especially on Crazy J and Teddy. How could I have improved them? Also, how long do you think a shoot should be?
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Post by Cliff of Doom on Sept 18, 2016 12:36:00 GMT -5
Top notch man. Missed a spot with the color coding, but with how much is there to go through, it would be hard to get it all. Loved how you sold your previous match as well as confirming the true ability of upcoming confrontation. Storyline is great, trying to balance wrestling, teaching, and at home life and still thinking he can do all three even though it hasn't worked so great so far. Be interesting to see how he can fix it, and fuck it up again. One of the best reads in the promo board in weeks. Thank you.
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Post by Thomas Uriel Bates on Sept 18, 2016 12:47:29 GMT -5
How long a shoot should be? That's a hard one, and one that I'm certain will differ from people to people. I usually do about 1,000 to 2,000 words for each scene, and usually have one shoot per opponent in a scene. I do it though, because Bates is trying to pick apart his opponent. He's trying to figure out who they are, what makes them tick, and what he needs to do to defeat them. Don't worry about the word count, and just say what you need to say.
As for what your shoot should be, in my opinion; make me believe you're going to beat them.
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Post by Lilith on Sept 18, 2016 12:59:57 GMT -5
I am loving your teacher side story. I did feel it lacked a real "shoot", but you did at least "think" about your opponent. Great writing though. Thank you. The shooting was real hard this week, especially on Crazy J and Teddy. How could I have improved them? Also, how long do you think a shoot should be? Your shoot was vastly superior to mine this week... I did a grand total of.... ZERO% shoot! Mwahahaha
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