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Post by Stephen Singh on Sept 11, 2016 16:50:02 GMT -5
Hey all, I just completed/posted my first RP in probably ten-odd years. And this place definitely has a different feel/level of talent then the last ones I was in. With that, I'd welcome any and all feedback for my first post. wcfwrestling.proboards.com/thread/31640/fools-fantasy-superstarThanks to whomever replies! Oh and if the feedback is "well, it got a little long" I'd probably agree. That was WAY more words than I intended it to be. I guess I just got excited to be back at it.
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Post by Oath Breaker on Sept 12, 2016 1:52:26 GMT -5
Excellent format and story telling. Great use of color. And I really appreciate the upsized font, makes it so much easier to read through. Love how you incorporated what you learned of 'other' stars in WCF as well as the WCF tweeter boards. I enjoyed reading it, which I normally have trouble with in longer posts, so you definitely did something right.
That said, when you get into 'conversation' there's little to break it as for the non verbal communication. Facial and hand gestures, scowling, noticing a hot woman that walks by, these sort of things. They add the extra flair of emotion that sets things over the top.
Loved it, would read it again. Great job man.
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