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Post by 'The Shine' Brent Alpine on Jun 26, 2016 17:45:04 GMT -5
Hi guys. Would really appreciate a bit of feedback. I procrastinated and left my latest RP, The Masquerade Ball, right up to the deadline. Therefore I had to really rush it and didn't get chance to proof read it. That's most reflected in the hurried prose and shoot. I'm curious to know if the story was easy to follow? I tend to write somewhat as if someone's reading one of my RPs for the first time and I'm never quite sure how much exposition to really include. Is the story intriguing at all? Any thoughts on these questions or a general review would be much appreciated. Still really finding it hard to get back in the swing of things. Thanks!
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Post by Henry Spearman on Jun 26, 2016 20:52:06 GMT -5
I only read the end shoot so that's all I can comment on right now. I was wondering if someone would use Henrys mother in a roleplay. No one did until she's dead hahaha.
I liked the way you did it though. Unless Alpine is legitimately sadistic he shouldn't want to say something like that. I thought the way you did it was clever.
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