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Post by dropkickgregory on Jun 23, 2016 14:48:21 GMT -5
I need a little feed back please
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Post by dropkickgregory on Jun 23, 2016 22:06:40 GMT -5
I also need feedback on part 2 please I tried pretty hard on this one and would like some honest feedback so I can continue to grow
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Post by excalibur on Jun 24, 2016 5:57:14 GMT -5
I personally liked it. I thought it was a big improvement on your last roleplay and it gave us an insight into the life of Greg St Matthews
Just a few things to make it that much better.
- More description of his surroundings would be nice. What is he wearing? Is his home big or small?
- Using colour when there is St Matthews talking and when there is somebody else can be very nice
- towards the end of part 2 there is a huge, long slab of text. In the future try break that down to smaller paragraphs.
Overall your roleplays have really improved and I'm looking forward to reading more from you
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Post by dropkickgregory on Jun 24, 2016 8:37:35 GMT -5
I appreciate it. man and I like the color idea but where I'm on mobile for the time being I can't really do it.
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Post by excalibur on Jun 24, 2016 17:00:13 GMT -5
I appreciate it. man and I like the color idea but where I'm on mobile for the time being I can't really do it. Ahh, i know what you mean. I only do OOC and Feedback stuff on my mobile. I always wait until I'm home to roleplay.
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