Discussion for "Focus".

[Mike Ragnal]

I'm gonna go on the record and say it's my best promo yet in WCF.

Comments?

[Deleted]

I'd like to see a little more character development and storyline progression, but I like your writing because it has an understated charm and a tongue-in-cheek humor that really makes your work stand out from the crowd. I think you're doing a fine job.

[daveyboone]

I believe with Cairo means when he says character development is getting to know what kind of person Mike Ragnal is, to me he seems like a guy who takes his work very seriously but can find time for some fun and games. Your rps are also getting better every time you create one. Storyline progression I think is where you give something for Briggs to work off of, like a backlash story as to why something happened between the 2 of you. This being why he cost you the match and what you plan on doing about it next time he chooses to make the wrong choice. I like this Sasha character, and I'm guessing she's the "sex freak" type since the past couple of rps have something to do with her wanting pleasing. Keep that up, great storyline there and she could easily be a character to help start a great angle later on for you that'd really help you..."make a name for yourself".