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ragemaxx
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The Mofo is live in Mempho!

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Feed back on "Return of the Mofo." Feb 5, 2016 19:34:18 GMT -5

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Post by ragemaxx on Feb 5, 2016 19:34:18 GMT -5

Open to any and all opinions on my most recent role play. I tried to write a bit more openly this time than my standard straight forward shoot. Nothing is to harsh. Let me have it! Thanks!!!

"Return of the Mofo"

SickWaves Blackamura
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Feed back on "Return of the Mofo." Feb 6, 2016 3:05:48 GMT -5

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Post by SickWaves Blackamura on Feb 6, 2016 3:05:48 GMT -5

Adding CD and a better feel for the character is good. You're definitely moving in the right direction there. My biggest criticism for you is to just make each scene a little more fleshed out. They're often times a little too short of scenes. I think you'd benefit as a writer and as a competitor if you were to work on that part of it, just really make the scenes bigger and try to add as much meaning to them as you can.

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