Roleplay Development by Lucious Starr

[Xtreme]

Hey, guys.

Okay, so I hate doing this, mostly cause there's always ONE guy who's going to make a sarcastic comment and nothing else and leave a nagging thought in the back of my head.

However.

I was told by... Someone... A couple weeks back that I could improve my promos with some character development. So, in response to my latest rp:

Too much? Not enough? How am I looking as far as improvement?

I'd like to evolve my writing a bit, and any comments or suggestions help. I just want to be sure whether I'm leaning in the right direction here...

[6ix God]

I'll go a different route:
You're a fantastic writer - your RPs aren't long enough. It's really all you're missing.

[Deleted]

I agree with 6. I really like your style, but you have to take your time to tell a story. I already know that you can write a good bit because of your two promos last week, so keep thinking like that but just make it work together in one promo. I haven't been one to give advice because I'm new here too and my promos are far from perfect, so take this as you will. I just want to say I like where you're coming from and I'd like to see you succeed because I think you can.