Feed back on "Could you?"

[ragemaxx]

Looking for feedback on my latest roleplay titled "Could you?" I tried to take this one in a different direction and add multiple elements. Nothing is too harsh, please be honest. Fire away!

Could you?

[Wade Moor]

Honest review bullet points:

- loved that you started going a little deeper into Rage's personal life. His exchange with Alenna felt genuine, but the comversation could have been bigger. I felt it was resolved a little too easily, and in my personal dealings with the opposite sex (sorry ladies ), nothing is ever resolved that easily haha.

- could have spent a little more time talking about your opponents. I know it can be difficult to shoot on your opponents, but you have to dig deep. Let that side of Maxx out. The scathing "I'm going to win this match" shoot is buried within all of us. You just have to tap into it!

- let the characters in your story shape Rage's world. We know he's from Memphis. He's a hometown boy and he loves it, but what else is inside of Rage? Let us know his desires, other than being at the top of WCF. What do other characters in your story perceive Rage as?

- being a PPV, you have a two promo limit, so you can touch on these points in your 2nd! You can do it bro!

[ragemaxx]

Thanks brother! Good stuff

[Gemini Battle]

Expanding on Wade specifically the argument with Aleena

Don't be afraid to have a story arc that goes on for a few rps. It really helps drive the character to a destination to have underlying stories under arching the main plot.