Doc's War RP...

[Doc Henry]

Well, Seth still has it, and once he posts it, some feedback would be cool... Fair warning I meant to get out a 'shoot' RP, but I wasn't paying attention to the week, so I scrapped it at the last minute since I couldn't get it done to the standard I wanted...

[Doc Henry]

Apparently it was so kick ass there wasn't anything to say?

[Wade Moor]

Haha I'll hit you with some feedback a little later my man!

[Gemini Battle]

Jk man.  You're good. I always have dug your stuff.  I'll take a closer look at it too.  

[Doc Henry]

Thanks guys... Yeah I got frustrated before when no one ever commented, being out for a bit makes m even more self loathing about it...

[Gemini Battle]

I loved the style. Short precise moments. None of the scenes drag on but there's plenty of decriptive narrative. There's the perfect amount of dialogue and scenery.

I'm trying to find something to criticize but I can't. The story was perfect in my opinion, a perfect return of a legend.

Ok... One thing. And this is purely a personal feeling. There are a lot of new guys here and they don't know the past of Doc and Reb. Maybe a brief background. You allude to it but in would have liked to have seen that expanded on. That being said im sure you will in the future.

Whatever. Its great. You're great. Huge penis.

[Wade Moor]

So, first impressions:

- Doc Henry is the Southern Bobby Cairo (which isn't a bad thing!)

- I liked Jimmy the Orderly. He should be a canon character in Doc Henry's promos. Too bad he had to eat that spear though so he'll most likely be joining the other cold bodies in the morgue haha.

- There are A LOT of interesting things going on in this promo. Not really having a frame of reference on a lot of your work kind of impedes my ability to comprehend some of it, but it definitely left me wanting more. You're probably planning on it, but maybe expand on the whole Master Ryushi storyline a little bit?

- Nothing really to say in the way it's written. Stylized very neat and it definitely gives Doc a voice. You put me in his world and I could imagine it all in my mind's eye. Great job there!

- The one thing that was lacking (and I know you brought it up already ) but the shoot is nonexistent. Doc is a tough guy, my man. You are a WCF veteran, 5x Tag Champ, 2x TV Champ, 1x US Champ, 1x Hardcore Champ, and 1x Internet Champ! Use that shit! Doc Henry should be coming back and staking his claim to WCF. This is his yard, for all intents and purposes! He should be showing all these young cats how to get it done, with style! You need to go fucking hard in your next promo! Don't worry about offending anyone bro. We're all pretty thick skinned around here. Just shoot from the hip and the heart! Use that quick draw! Use your history in WCF to get it done!

- I personally want to see Doc embroiled in a rivalry, and it looks like we're about to get that with Oblivion. One thing though, it seems like everyone has their "dance" partners, so to speak. I want to see people move out of their comfort zones and start a feud with somebody they've never really talked to before. I know one of the newer guys here would be 100% willing to work a feud with you and they're very creative people. Getting involved in a feud is the quickest way to propel yourself up the card and I know Doc Henry deserves to be higher up than he is!

- You could start Doc Henry on a "Rookie Killer" gimmick (directly opposite of Randy Orton's Legend Killer) That would be interesting as hell! It would make me want to tune it to see what Doc is up to that week and what he's doing on the show.

- Overall, this was a really fun promo. Fun, not completely captivating, but it definitely left me wanting to know more. Nailing the shoot should be your number one priority and then expanding on Doc Henry's world should be number two. Everything else will just fall in to place.

Great job, Doc!