The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback)

K. L. Henson Mid-Carder @killhenson F四urD死ath Posts: 967	The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback) Jul 5, 2015 18:47:27 GMT -5 Crow McMorris likes this Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by K. L. Henson on Jul 5, 2015 18:47:27 GMT -5 This one is one I am SUPER curious about what people think. Please let me know! I will give feedback for feedback.
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Jeff Purse Main Eventer @thefuturejeffp Posts: 4,712	The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback) Jul 9, 2015 12:14:29 GMT -5 K. L. Henson likes this Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Jeff Purse on Jul 9, 2015 12:14:29 GMT -5 Ill get you some feedback later today. Sorry its so late lol.
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The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback) Jul 10, 2015 15:52:52 GMT -5 K. L. Henson likes this

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Post by Jeff Purse on Jul 10, 2015 15:52:52 GMT -5

I have absolutely nothing negative to say about this. The only advice I would give is to work on the 'shoot'.

But honestly dude, this fucker got me captivated, it grabbed my attention...it lost my attention a bit at the shoot, but the story was on point.

Work on that shoot, but honestly man, this was great. Creepy and a little bit of humor...

I wish I could give you more, but I really can't. Good job homie.

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The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback) Jul 10, 2015 23:09:53 GMT -5

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Jul 10, 2015 15:52:52 GMT -5 Jeff Purse said:

Now when you say the shoot, do you mean the whole second half or just the multi paragraph rant near the end. Because yeah, the rant part I agree was not as strong as I would have liked it. But what did you think of the Kayla Wincer part?

Edit: Also, is there an RP you would like me to return the feedback for?

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The Moth on the Water (feedback for feedback) Jul 11, 2015 0:06:11 GMT -5

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Post by Jeff Purse on Jul 11, 2015 0:06:11 GMT -5

Yeah I meant the multi paragraph part. The Kayla part was fucking awesome. I was like...literally like...wanting to help that girl. It was so good. It drew me in and get me invested.

I suppose any Abaddon RP's. And really like...the character and the story in general.

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