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Post by Howard Black on May 22, 2015 13:56:54 GMT -5
VII: Insult and InjuryOkay, chums, what do you guys think? Specifically, did you like the bit in the middle about the morning jog narrated by Howard or think it fell flat? Lemme know! Especially since I've been drafted to micro-review every single losing RP 
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Post by K. L. Henson on May 22, 2015 15:12:03 GMT -5
I thought the RP was very solid! I actually took a note of interest in the jogging bit as an interesting focus on training as well as voice. Your promo was very well done, had a good voice to it and your character seems very defined. I am interested in the Wolf-headed man, raises good questions in my mind about what it all means. If I am to give a critique (as I always try to find something no matter how good it is) I would say the description, not always, but at times seemed a little dry. My suggestion, if you choose to take it, is maybe mess around with the order you deliver certain information or maybe find a little bit of livelier words when you can. Over all though it was a good RP! Keep up the good work!
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Post by Howard Black on May 22, 2015 15:14:33 GMT -5
Thanks, KL! Description is something I'm always frustrated with; I really dislike when people get too purple with their description, but I understand the importance of it for a scene. Hard balance to strike.
Lemme re-read your RP and I'll throw you some feedback!
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Post by Gemini Battle on May 22, 2015 16:14:27 GMT -5
From a shoot perspective I thought it was too focussed on upcoming matches rather than this match. BUT it leads to good hype for your impending match with TUBS given he is still the champ.
I did like the in your head while jogging. Cool idea just don't let it get tired. Use or sparingly. Imo. I agree with both of you about scenery, it's important but font drill it into our head too bad.
You know how to tell a story and how to push your character. I suggest, as I did with Dune, put segments in the show. Not all of us get to read your rps and your story can get lost if you only put it there.
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2015 18:17:10 GMT -5
The whole rp was beautiful like a morning sunrise. It made me weep like a little girl and make me feel like I was high on sugar all at the same time. It gave me hope for a brighter tomorrow and yet at the same time give me the wisdom to know i should deal with the rain to get the rainbow! It was wonderful in every way. I tasted the rainbow throughout!
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Post by Howard Black on May 22, 2015 18:27:18 GMT -5
Can't tell if Katherine actually liked it or is trolling.
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2015 18:32:01 GMT -5
Lol I actually did like it... I maybe did go a bit OTT lol
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