Feedback for my debut RP here

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Just wanted to get feedback on my debut RP here, I welcome positive and negative feedback and I will take it all on board and won't take offence to any of it.

Thanks,
Matt

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Coming in and being brand new to a place is difficult. No one knows your character, no one knows what you're about. Basically, no one knows anything about you. And then having your debut match, you have a lot to focus on and I think you did it well.

You told us who Matthew Robinson is, he has a family, he's a guy who's been in the business a while. You gave reasons for his new venture and effectively bridged everything together to get us from point A to point B and you didn't give us a bunch of unnecessary information about your past (ie: ramble on about it). Instead you took what you had and worked it into why you're here. It kept match relevance as you summed up the excitement of having your debut here while giving us some character development.

The RP was everything it needed to be for your very first one here. You seem to know your character and what his motives and aspirations are, but you are taking it one step at a time and that is good. Once you start working with people here, the character development will roll on like nothing and you'll start to tell us more of the story. I enjoyed the read. Very well done first RP.


Side note: Seth will probably move this to the Roleplay Discussion Boards. That is generally where RP feedback goes, but you wouldn't have known that yet

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Your first RP was rather impressive to me. I liked it because much like Sarah above me said, you gave us a real glimpse into who exactly Matthew Robinson is. He comes across as a real character and that alone is a challenge in and of itself. You established him as a character coming in from success into something new, something fresh and I am interested to see where it goes. And also like Sarah said, you incorporated your past and made it relevant to your presence here instead of using it as justification, which is gratifying to say the least.

For an introductory RP and your first here, it was solid. Vivid and descriptive scenery and a character that again came across as believable so props to you. I certainly hope to see more of you here in WCF/EPPW.

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Thanks guys, I was a bit nervous when I first posted it because I know from experience that what may work in one fed won't necessarily work in another