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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 22, 2018 17:41:36 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Aug 22, 2018 18:02:14 GMT -5
Roleplay: The Book of 903
Hander: Odin
Overall thoughts: Straight to the Point
Rating Overview
Scene Description: 4
Character Development: 4
Shoot: 5
Flow: 5
RATING: 4.5 of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
Roleplays like this are why I love feedback from you. This is a major match and you showed it. Sometimes in some of your rps I have gotten the idea that you thought it was a throw away match against a throw away opponent. Not here. I have been doing this for 13 years and you are one of the best characters I have ever seen in those 13 years.
Scene Description: You really set the scene. My favorite line of scene description was your entire fourth scene. I felt like I truly was at that airport.
Character Development: You always show that Odin is a big deal and he should be. He is everything the fans and the stars of WCF should strive to be.
Shoot: Straight to the point. Love the Les Mis reference with the number. Telling him about the number of title changes you have seen and how many "Mikey X's" have come and gone was brilliant.
Flow: This was an easy read and flowed, in my opinion, perfectly.
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SUGGESTIONS
Even though I don't feel like I should be giving you suggestions, the only thing I think is thought the 903 thing was brilliant it was over done. I feel as if 15 mentions of 903 was too much.
Besides that this promo was simply amazing and very fun to read. Great job big man!
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 22, 2018 18:06:58 GMT -5
I felt it was over done too but I wanted to hammer home the fact that I said: "from this point out, you're just a number"
But yah, agreed. a tad overdone lol
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Post by Deleted on Aug 22, 2018 18:15:42 GMT -5
I felt it was over done too but I wanted to hammer home the fact that I said: "from this point out, you're just a number" But yah, agreed. a tad overdone lol lol. Other than that little bit I loved it though man
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Post by Odin Balfore on Aug 22, 2018 18:19:59 GMT -5
awesome, thank you
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Post by Alex Richards on Aug 31, 2018 22:24:01 GMT -5
First off.. who I am to critique an Odin Balfore roleplay anyways?
The most important thing one can take from this.. the thing that won Odin the world title is this.. know your history.
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