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Jul 10, 2017 0:27:15 GMT -5
Post by Troy Wilson on Jul 10, 2017 0:27:15 GMT -5
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Jul 10, 2017 9:02:26 GMT -5
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Post by Dionysus on Jul 10, 2017 9:02:26 GMT -5
I'll look it over later today, if that's alright.
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Jul 10, 2017 15:31:57 GMT -5
Post by Troy Wilson on Jul 10, 2017 15:31:57 GMT -5
I'll look it over later today, if that's alright. No problem, and no rush man
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Jul 10, 2017 17:17:06 GMT -5
Post by Oath Breaker on Jul 10, 2017 17:17:06 GMT -5
With the exception of Bonnie Blue, the divas are all bat-shit insane. The running joke in WCF, which ironically became canon, is the depreciated condition of the wrestling ring and just about everything WCF related. Another is that WCF doesn't like to spend money, so time with the camera is sometimes NOT a WCF camera. Smartphones, news crews, self hired are a few ways to go there. Paychecks are almost never on time, and sometimes not paid for a month or longer, because Seth ... nuff said. There are many others, but discovery of them is half the fun.
As for your writing, it's clean. Unfortunately it's lacking in entertainment value. It's a nice write-up, but that won't win matches here. The writing is good, but you have to catch Seth's attention, and that's the one that determines the winner. Shock, emotion, comedy, find a niche that makes reading interesting. Another trick, too many of us don't sell our opponent gimmick. Those that do seem favored to win when judging looks to be tough.
Good color coding, clean spacing, rather easy to read. No big blocks of text. I could relax in the reading of your promo, which in itself is hard to do. You showed a little of your character heart with the helping of the neighborhood kids. Great stuff.
I guess the question is, whether you want to be competitive, or just casual. You have a great start and can go either direction and get positive results.
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Jul 10, 2017 18:10:22 GMT -5
Post by Troy Wilson on Jul 10, 2017 18:10:22 GMT -5
With the exception of Bonnie Blue, the divas are all bat-shit insane. The running joke in WCF, which ironically became canon, is the depreciated condition of the wrestling ring and just about everything WCF related. Another is that WCF doesn't like to spend money, so time with the camera is sometimes NOT a WCF camera. Smartphones, news crews, self hired are a few ways to go there. Paychecks are almost never on time, and sometimes not paid for a month or longer, because Seth ... nuff said. There are many others, but discovery of them is half the fun.
As for your writing, it's clean. Unfortunately it's lacking in entertainment value. It's a nice write-up, but that won't win matches here. The writing is good, but you have to catch Seth's attention, and that's the one that determines the winner. Shock, emotion, comedy, find a niche that makes reading interesting. Another trick, too many of us don't sell our opponent gimmick. Those that do seem favored to win when judging looks to be tough.
Good color coding, clean spacing, rather easy to read. No big blocks of text. I could relax in the reading of your promo, which in itself is hard to do. You showed a little of your character heart with the helping of the neighborhood kids. Great stuff.
I guess the question is, whether you want to be competitive, or just casual. You have a great start and can go either direction and get positive results. Thank you for the canon information I'll try to incorporate it into my next RP. I've also noticed that about the entertainment part, but never knew what to add to it too make it more fun to read. How do I pick the right niche to add to my writing and character? Also what do you mean about selling the opponent's gimmick, do you mean speaking on it during a shoot or something else? I'm really shooting to be a competitor, thanks you for the feedback!
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Jul 10, 2017 22:10:44 GMT -5
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Post by Dionysus on Jul 10, 2017 22:10:44 GMT -5
With the exception of Bonnie Blue, the divas are all bat-shit insane. The running joke in WCF, which ironically became canon, is the depreciated condition of the wrestling ring and just about everything WCF related. Another is that WCF doesn't like to spend money, so time with the camera is sometimes NOT a WCF camera. Smartphones, news crews, self hired are a few ways to go there. Paychecks are almost never on time, and sometimes not paid for a month or longer, because Seth ... nuff said. There are many others, but discovery of them is half the fun.
As for your writing, it's clean. Unfortunately it's lacking in entertainment value. It's a nice write-up, but that won't win matches here. The writing is good, but you have to catch Seth's attention, and that's the one that determines the winner. Shock, emotion, comedy, find a niche that makes reading interesting. Another trick, too many of us don't sell our opponent gimmick. Those that do seem favored to win when judging looks to be tough.
Good color coding, clean spacing, rather easy to read. No big blocks of text. I could relax in the reading of your promo, which in itself is hard to do. You showed a little of your character heart with the helping of the neighborhood kids. Great stuff.
I guess the question is, whether you want to be competitive, or just casual. You have a great start and can go either direction and get positive results. Wait. What do you mean by "competitive or casual?"
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Jul 11, 2017 7:45:08 GMT -5
Post by Oath Breaker on Jul 11, 2017 7:45:08 GMT -5
Wait. What do you mean by "competitive or casual?" Competitive is when your writing is always trying to improve upon your last piece, or to always do better than your opponent.
Casual is when your in it for the fun, and not worried about who does better. This is a means of relaxation, unwinding from the stress of life.
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Jul 11, 2017 8:00:44 GMT -5
Post by Oath Breaker on Jul 11, 2017 8:00:44 GMT -5
2. Maybe O.B. meant something different, and he can say so for himself if he did, but in my mind "selling the opponent's gimmick" means taking what your opponent establishes as his own character and going with it as though it were true. When I wrote my first RP in WCF, I saw an older RP of my opponent Jaymz in which he killed a man, and I decided I was going to comment on that. When I went to comment on it, I didn't say, "LOL, OMG, you didn't really kill that guy, it was totes fake" and I didn't have my character laugh it off like he was too cool for school. I had my character react like he had legitimately just seen a murder on video tape, i.e. I had him ralph all over the floor and consider calling the police. That was "selling" the opponent's gimmick. Yes and more.
Oblivion is a monster and has more career kills inside the ring than anyone else in WCF (to my knowledge) and should be treated as though your life is on the line every time you face him unless your character defies death or has already had a run-in with Obi and came out for the better.
Oath Breaker is an adrenaline junkie and martial artist. His strikes should be avoided, and threats to his life are often met with a warrior's lust for battle.
Udy is a demon wolf with a cult following, and should ne looked on as such. How does your character respond differently knowing a demon lurks within?
Character accomplishment is just a beginning, it's also about the character and personality of him/her. Freezer Burn is an absolute sadist when it comes to training Oath Breaker or any other wrestler. He gets results, but most stay away from his training style because the risk is there he might just go too far and cripple you.
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