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Post by Howard Black on Apr 9, 2015 19:50:25 GMT -5
Prelude: Enter Howard BlackThis is the first RP I've written in years in this sort of style, and I'd love some feedback. My intention was to introduce the first set of recurring characters who will be involved in the greater story line for this character (which is roughly sketched out in my head at this point and subject to change based on match results/character progression). I also hoped to forgo a typical backstage promo-style introduction while still implementing a few tried-and-true cliches like the compulsory gym scene in a way that paints a picture of the character through his actions/interactions rather than his own words. Subtlety is the target I'm aiming for. So how did I do? What could I brush up on? Some questions I'd like to ask you guys: 1) After reading the post, what was your impression/reaction to the character? 2) I hoped to hint at perhaps a deep sense of insecurity in him without being forthright; do you think I succeeded? 3) Does the dialogue feel organic? This is particularly important to me concerning the interactions with his wife/family. 4) Was the description too much? Or not enough? Anything else, naturally, is appreciated. Thanks for reading!
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Post by Logan on Apr 10, 2015 2:02:57 GMT -5
Giving me wood. Keep it up and you'll keep me up, kid. Loving it.
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Post by Howard Black on Apr 10, 2015 10:43:04 GMT -5
Flattery will get you everywhere But I always know I can do better! If anyone else has any comments, all appreciated!
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Post by Deleted on Apr 10, 2015 10:48:42 GMT -5
I think you are off to a good start. Can't wait to see where your character goes. Also looking forward to seeing you face Z-MAC that should be interesting which Honey Badger doesn't give a fuck the most.
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