Post by Odin Balfore on Dec 14, 2011 23:31:53 GMT -5
NightRider
RP - Tag Team from HELL
Slam! 12/18/11
Triple threat Tag Team Match
PRO'S
~ Very good scene set up.
~ Easy to read / Navigate
CON'S
~ Lack of shoot
~ Lack of character Development.
THOUGHTS
Let me start by saying that I've read everyone of your rp's thuss far an I enjoy your " old school " style. It's short and to the point. Thats how things went down back in the golden age and thats personally what i like to read. HOWEVER that said, your pro's and con's are pretty much the same. You've given little by little of your CD but your shots very lacking.
To me your shoot reads very basic. " I'm going to beat you up in that ring. " and its been that way. If you get into more detail with it then your RP's will be so much better match wise. You have good character interaction which makes me laugh, even if its not suppose too, i can just see it in my mind an thats definatly a plus.
NOTES
You have a strong base for an RP in all your RP's so it stands well but add some to it, flesh it out, let it breath.. details. CD can come in time through weekly RP's but that shoot needs to happen.
Rating. 2.5/5
you had the same sort of issues that Blade had last week. Gotta get over that hump and find that WCF niche.
