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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 1:54:26 GMT -5
what did you guys think? I tried writing a little bit differently this time... likes? dislikes?
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 2:30:31 GMT -5
I hate you.
No seriously though, good job. Loved it.
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Post by Speede on Jun 24, 2011 2:44:01 GMT -5
Pretty good. Pretty good, man. And I got a real good laugh out of it; I'm a straight guy, but I got a good laugh out of your RP.
The first laughter started from the Eminem lyrics- gotta say, I'm a fan of his work, and using those lyrics really gave me a laugh. Not to mention that Kaylyn's entrance music is an instrumental of 'Not Afraid' - subliminal joke in there really.
Carrying it over, your character is looking for her in a strip club- that was a huge statement in itself, then the whole fake tits line, bringing up the possibility she's a transvestite, a Chris Brown/Rihanna joke... even taking a shot at Creeping Death. And of course, the "better faster stronger" line that made me think of a song by... is it Kanye West? Points for the Kanye song.
And then into the second scene... That's where you started to lose me a bit. You're like "Anyone can perform a striptease." I was sitting there like *facepalm* 'is he really gonna.. oh my god, no.' That's where the laughter really started to die out.
But then you got me back laughing as I read the line about her being a horny lesbian stripping on television. and then there came the sentence "I am NOT attracted to your desperate for attention, sex teasing, game playing, mind manipulating, staff blowing, crawling with crabs, HIV, and every other STD or STI, ass!" Makes me think of a Ric Flair tribute, but on a more hate-based scale than actually producing praise for her actions like a Ric Flair line.... hey dude, can I borrow that? I need to get this girl to leave be alone IRL- I mean, she's a year ahead of me in school, and it's completely obvious she's a whore, but she keeps flirting with me, and it drives me crazy because the entire school knows about sexual encounters she's had with at least a dozen guys, and I need to get her to stop. That line is just perfect- can I borrow it please?
One question still gets to me a bit- Isn't Gil a raccoon, like, the animal? Your character is talking to an animal? An animal that belongs to Odin? The animal that owns a motherf***ing strip club? Okay, but it does sound a bit weird.
Either way, dude, that was a great RP. That was... epic.
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 2:48:19 GMT -5
Yes, agreed, it was fucking epic, and yes Odin's Raccoon owns the strip club. Damn conversation with Gil had me shaking my head laughing and Blake will get his slaps for his comments... count on that!
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 2:53:52 GMT -5
i'll give you a slap.....  LMAO |
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 2:55:24 GMT -5
YOU!..... ACK! GRRR! IMMA GET YOU BLAKE! MARK MY WORDS!
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 2:56:31 GMT -5
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 2:58:52 GMT -5
STOP IT WITH THAT DAMN PICTURE! LOL
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 3:04:13 GMT -5
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 3:05:18 GMT -5
.... omg you did not just go there...
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 14:12:36 GMT -5
gettin rid of my fan bar huh?  ...Alrighty then! lmao |
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 14:21:47 GMT -5
I didn't have it up for a while rofl! You just now noticing?!
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 14:23:09 GMT -5
oh lol, yes?
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 15:14:09 GMT -5
Silly Blake. Pay attention! I have to keep changing them cuz there is too many characters
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Post by Corey Black on Jun 24, 2011 18:36:07 GMT -5
Slammin' me?
Brainbuster.
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 19:59:11 GMT -5
Hehehe
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 22:21:11 GMT -5
haha, mayyyybe
jk lol
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Post by The Perfect Ten on Jun 24, 2011 22:42:57 GMT -5
Muahahhaahah
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Post by Ryan Blake on Jun 24, 2011 22:51:55 GMT -5
but it was good right? lol
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Post by Speede on Jun 24, 2011 22:55:17 GMT -5
but it was good right? lol No, it sucked. YES IT WAS GOOD! Did you forget how elaborated I made my last post? |
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