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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 11, 2011 10:48:56 GMT -5
Yeah it's funny how the timing for these ideas lines up sometimes... Thanks to Reb for the help though... Gave me the idea ford the coeds, and I ran from there...
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Post by Johnny Reb on Apr 12, 2011 10:36:11 GMT -5
;D The whole thing came out even better than I expected it to. I think you've achieved a new level of quality in your RP'ing, so...keep it up  |
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 16, 2011 11:39:57 GMT -5
I was gonna show more of the Markman surveillance tape, but writing necrobeastiality is pushing even my comfort levels... However, I feel good about this one...
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 18, 2011 9:30:42 GMT -5
Fucking writers block... Went with an easy simple shoot.... Sorry...
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 23, 2011 23:06:37 GMT -5
So, I'm gonna be having some fun with these RPs... Any and all comments/encouragements are welcome...
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Post by Jason Cashe on Apr 24, 2011 3:26:12 GMT -5
You didn't have but 1 sentence on the match....
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 24, 2011 9:04:53 GMT -5
And....
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Post by Speede on Apr 24, 2011 11:41:32 GMT -5
You talked more about a match other than your own than you did about your actual match. I don't mean to be a douche, but that RP was something that reminds me of my rookie days; There was no trash being talked, there was little descritpion, and honestly, I didn't even hear the ol' redneck voice that pops into my head whenever i hear your character (or any other, for that matter) talk. At least say something ABOUT the reasons Nate Bishop and Ana valentine can't win.
Theoretically speaking, the plotline of the RP was good- the rednecks weren't appreciated in Mexico, and a bunch of Mexicans tried to send them packing. If you could've expanded on that a bit more, as well as adding more dialogue and trash-talking (perhaps even within the conversation), you could've made this a lot better with a minimal amount of additional effort.
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Post by Johnny Reb on Apr 24, 2011 11:48:08 GMT -5
You have a point, Speede, but I offer a counterpoint: When a guy says he's going to let his fists do the talking... it would then be sort of untruthful to go back on that and talk trash anyway. Granted, Doc could have said a little bit more regarding the match...but its only his first RP this week, and maybe he has something else in mind for the next one(s)... I thought it was fine. The opening paragraph was nice and descriptive, a little reminiscent of Daschiell Hammett (sp?) and other classic pulp/detective authors... and the overall story let the reader know precisely what sort of man Doc is. That being, of course, the sort of man that The Inveterate Confederate won't put up with for very much longer... |
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 25, 2011 11:14:14 GMT -5
So, yeah, Doc does get his hands dirty from time to time... Kinda left myself with not much room to go after my first one, so I just took the logical path and pushed it even further, and showed Doc's violent and demented side... Every evil geniou leader has their sick and twistedness... Muhahahahahahahaha...
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Post by Deleted on Apr 25, 2011 13:47:48 GMT -5
I believe the kids call it "epic".
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 25, 2011 15:45:34 GMT -5
Ty Bobby, I do believe I gave Greenie and Obli a run on the sick and twisted.... Hell I may have even upped the ante...
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Post by Speede on Apr 25, 2011 15:52:24 GMT -5
Ty Bobby, I do believe I gave Greenie and Obli a run on the sick and twisted.... Hell I may have even upped the ante... Yeah... you did... I'm not even kidding, Greenie and Obi have done some spooky RPs, but that was downright demented. I'm not even kidding, I was shaking as I read that. |
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Post by Doc Henry on Apr 25, 2011 15:58:52 GMT -5
What's funny is, I held back soooo much because I didn't want to go too far....
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