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Post by Deleted on Dec 13, 2018 22:38:18 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Dec 16, 2018 17:47:10 GMT -5
Could someone please give him feedback? Thanks!
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Post by Alex Richards on Dec 16, 2018 20:58:21 GMT -5
It showed that you put a lot of work into that. Great job
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Post by Vincent Augustine on Dec 16, 2018 23:33:40 GMT -5
I really dug the CD portion of your RP. You got into some depth and really showed some emotion and feeling to the character, if that were the only RP I ever read about Kennedy Matthews I feel that I would understand that character greatly. Great job with the build of it, your inner dialogue and opening narrative at the beginning was great, it both set the scene, and mood for the RP. 9/10
The Shoot for me was lacking a bit. All the fire, all the build up of the first part of the CD and then well it felt flat, like I was always feeling on the edge but never felt like I got over it. Kind of like riding up on a roller coaster seeing the top, then starting over at the bottom but never getting to feel the drop. You had a lot too say, and I feel you strayed a bit from your opponent a little, and the whole make it a title match idea though not major in your RP is kind of cliche. Now you did make some great points, I like how you tied all the stuff from the past into it, and rolled it all together, so the shoot was pretty good, I just felt it didn't quite have the edge it could have had based on what the build up was. 8/10
Overall 8.5/10
Very good RP, and Bonnie has her work cut out for her.
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