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Post by Scott Slayer on Nov 25, 2018 17:24:31 GMT -5
Just posted a new RP. Let me know what you guys think. Is it my best one, my worst one, needs work, just be honest.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 26, 2018 14:44:11 GMT -5
Roleplay: Face The Harsh Truth Hander: Scott Slayer
Overall thoughts: You really stepped your game up this week.
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Rating Overview
Scene Description: 3.5 Character Development: 4 Shoot: 3.5 Flow: 3.5
RATING: 3.625 of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
You continue to improve bro. You are doing an amazing job in learning who Scott Slayer is.
Scene Description:
Could still use some added description but you did the best you have done in this category yet. Keep up the improvement.
Character Development:
Tying the story of Scott's parents to DW and his dad was a great job. Did not see that coming. I want to know more about Slayer now.
Shoot:
Stepped up a little but I want more. Still left wanting more aggression. I feel like Scott needs to just let the fur fly!
Flow:
Easy read. Flow was decent just needs better transitions.
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SUGGESTIONS
You did a great job on doing research on your opponent. Just give us a little bit more and you will be gold.
Jay aka Kennedy Matthews and Edwina Lockheart
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Post by Scott Slayer on Nov 26, 2018 15:15:02 GMT -5
Thanks Jay
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Post by Corey Black on Nov 26, 2018 19:22:23 GMT -5
I can't speak for everyone but I'm having a blast seeing someone like you coming in and really showing drive and improvement. So, thanks. And keep it up! You're kickin' ass dude.
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Post by Scott Slayer on Nov 26, 2018 19:38:00 GMT -5
Thanks Corey. Really appreciate the kind words, especially from the owner.
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