Carpe Diem: Seize The Day! Feedback

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Would be much appreciated, thanks!

[Benjamin Atreyu]

Another great RP.

Right away with the training style, I sensed a kind of Kung-fu-ish vibe with the whole punishment/durability type training, its a real dramatic move, but I was definitely digging it.

The description is kind of unorthodox, IN A GOOD WAY! It kind of felt like someone recalling the whole ordeal first hand, making it seem like a legend or story someone would tell to wow or amaze people, which I think is a great way to go with a "against the odds" type story.

Plus, I enjoyed the juxtaposition between what was going on in Hank's mind and what was going on in Sarah's mind. Hank being there as a good opportunity to catch a one-of-a-kind moment. While Sarah isn't at all interested in the world of theatrics and showmanship. Its great insight to the character.

One thing I was pleasantly surprised by was how you not only used dialogue and description, but also the format to tell a story. The size of the wacks adding emphasis and atmosphere, really driving the point home.

[Ayria Adams]

I liked it. Typical Sarah Twilight awesomness =)