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Post by "The Animal" Samuel McPherson on Mar 3, 2019 13:37:12 GMT -5
I noticed for quite some time now, I'm really struggling with my work. I know I've put out a post saying I'm leaving, but if I do stay, I would like some suggestions of where I should work on. The losses aren't a big deal for me and it has nothing to do with losses on why I'm requesting feedback on my stuff. Hit me up either here or in PM on where I need work and where the bugs are because honestly, I'm struggling right now apart from the promo part on what to write for the match.
Thank you to those who do help me.
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Post by Odin Balfore on Mar 3, 2019 21:00:54 GMT -5
Roleplay: Unexpected Title Match
Handler: Samuel McPhearson
Overall Thoughts:
Breakdown
Scene Description 3 Character Development 2 Shoot 3 Flow 4
Overall Rating 3 out of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
In looking at this promo and the past few weeks I can sense the burnout and clearly can see it. What I’m reading though is what I could consider to be ‘average’ in terms of overall RP product. Are you capable of more - hell yeah. Are you burnt out - hell yah.
So we have some issue, in general but no so much with the promos. You’re currently producing work that's going to cause you to tread water. In truth, you might as well drown and come back to life or fight to stay alive. You treading water right now is going to make it worse. That's transitioned over the character of Sam feeling indifferent about everything. However, everything in your RP is just OK and that's the problem.
If you keep going you’re going to resent the work and not want to go up for down but out the door. Like you’ll mop up no shows and ‘lesser talent’ then get smashed by guys like Teo who YOU SHOULD KILL
But you arnt.
How do you fix it ? You have to care about the character again. See if Teo or Extreme or sumone wants to start a program with you and try to make things happen.
There isnt much I can say in regards to how do you RP better. We both know you can RP better. We both know you can make some good work. You’re just indifferent to doing so and once you have something to strive for - bingo. You could have picked yourself up at TILL death but you didnt. That's problem I suspect of you not having a direction even with the TV title coming your way.
Funny thing is, TEO is your foil. Teo would play great off you since your opposing characters.
If you still have the urge to RP and you have time to put up 3k, you can get things done. But what do you want to get done?
PM man, we’ll talk about this.
As far as this RP and your others of late, they aint bad but they aint great. Everything could be extended more and elaborated and brought to life with a style. When I think of your character, I don’t think, yah, this kind of work is his best - because its not.
We all go through funks. We all get there. Hell, I’m running 2 characters in 2 feds with 2 completely different styles but I’m a madman.
Maybe you should be too.
Maybe you should be like - fuck it, crazy shit about to pop off in this promo. You gotta have fun - you gotta make your own fun and people will enjoy it and people will read it and you’ll start winning and killing it.
Dont be worried about the CD or the descript or the shoot. Worry about making cool shit happen and build off of that. At least I find when I’m havin fun, everything just clicks and I think ppl can see when I’m enjoying a rp and when I’m just slapping check marks into boxes.
TIPS:
Ask yourself
WHO IS McPhreason
WHAT motivates him ( or you )
WHERE does he ( or you ) want to go in WCF
WHY is he like this
HOW is he ( or you) going to get there.
If you sit down and start asking yourself this, you’ll figure it out and maybe you’ll get somewhere to where you can get a angle going and flesh it all out.
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Post by Alex Richards on Mar 3, 2019 21:32:59 GMT -5
yeah.. what Odin said.
Beyond that..
To me it's important to enjoy what you're writing. If you're into it then readers are more likely to enjoy what you're doing.
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