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Post by Scott Slayer on Dec 2, 2018 20:57:41 GMT -5
New RP posted. I personally think it’s my best one yet. Let me know what you think of it.
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Post by Alex Richards on Dec 3, 2018 1:07:04 GMT -5
It is your best one yet. Keep up the good work scott
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Post by Scott Slayer on Dec 3, 2018 6:38:28 GMT -5
Thanks Alex
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Post by Noble Savage on Dec 4, 2018 0:13:56 GMT -5
Roleplay: The Devil in Me Hander: Scott Slayer
Overall thoughts: this is it. I am officially a huge fan of Scott Slayer. ___________________________________
Rating Overview
Scene Description: 4 Character Development: 4 Shoot: 5 Flow: 4
RATING: 4 out of 5
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CRITICAL REVIEW
I agree that this is your best work yet, and I am happy to see that you are embracing your character in such a dynamic way.
Scene Description:
You paint the picture but did not waste too much time outlining detail. It felt almost like an Eminem song where he lets you hear the beat before completely destroying it verbally. That's what you did here: you laid out out the track and let us know it was there, but quickly reminded us that's not why we're here. Good balanced use of scenery. The only thing that would make it better is porting in the usage of all 5 senses to make us feel more like we're there. Not always necessary, though so no need to go crazy. It's good enough.
Character Development: I love how concise and unfaltering Scott is. In this roleplay you showed that his emotions only fuel him rather than hold him back, and it literally gives us a view as to WHY Scott is the way he is today. The bullying, the abusive drunk uncle, I mean... That clearly lit the fire in Scott thwt made him who he is today, he didn't give up then, and he won't give up now. Good job!
Shoot: Flawless. You nailed it this week! I can't say anything about this shoot that would help improve it, because it's perfect. You dissected your own character's strengths and weaknesses while breaking down your opponents in the process, getting in their head, and truly going for their jugular. Like I said, your opening was like a slow motion volleyball floating up in the air and your shoot was that vicious hand that came and spiked it! I loved every bit of it.
Flow: Your flow is without a doubt improving tremendously and this week it made your roleplay a serious joy to read. It had an exponential rhythm to it where it started out with a gradual build up and it was increasingly exciting.
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SUGGESTIONS Uhh... I got nothing. Keep doing what you're doing. CONGRATULATIONS! You have finally FOUND Scott Slayer, and we are all loving him! Thanks for bringing such a rolling punch of a promo that puts any doubters to rest. A total game changer. Great job!
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Post by Scott Slayer on Dec 4, 2018 6:36:12 GMT -5
Thank you Noble
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Post by 'Jazzy' John McCarty on Dec 4, 2018 7:02:26 GMT -5
I don't usually give out feedback, but I would like to tell you that this was a pretty good RP, easily your best.
I would 100% agree with Noble here.
Just that my suggestion would to be perhaps make the RPs a tad longer, I usually try and aim for 2k, but this is only a very minor thing.
Keep up the good work! 👍
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Post by Scott Slayer on Dec 4, 2018 7:23:20 GMT -5
Thank you John
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