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Post by Deleted on Oct 30, 2018 22:48:13 GMT -5
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Post by Vincent Augustine on Oct 30, 2018 23:01:48 GMT -5
It's a very solid RP, the shoot was in my opinion pretty good, I'd give it a 7 out of 10. However the color choice drives me crazy, I'm not opposed to color, but the darker purple against a black back ground makes it hard as hell to read, especially when you had a 600 word long paragraph of all dialogue. I would recommend maybe breaking up the long walls of dialog text a bit with some narrative. I have heard people say but they are just sitting there talking not doing anything else, next time you are just talking with someone pay attention to what they are doing when talking, sometimes the mannerisms are as impactful as the words.
IT flowed pretty nice, personally again I am not a fan of multiple scenes in RP's, but that's a personal thing. I'd give the flow and the CD portion of what you did a 7 out of 10 as well. Most of this was because I feel you could have explored so much more of what you were working to get across in the CD portion of the RP. And that there is the fine line, how much is too much?
Overall I would say the RP was a solid 7 out of 10, my recommendation is I'd always rather go too far with my thoughts and ideas then risk dialing them back and not going far enough.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 30, 2018 23:12:03 GMT -5
It's a very solid RP, the shoot was in my opinion pretty good, I'd give it a 7 out of 10. However the color choice drives me crazy, I'm not opposed to color, but the darker purple against a black back ground makes it hard as hell to read, especially when you had a 600 word long paragraph of all dialogue. I would recommend maybe breaking up the long walls of dialog text a bit with some narrative. I have heard people say but they are just sitting there talking not doing anything else, next time you are just talking with someone pay attention to what they are doing when talking, sometimes the mannerisms are as impactful as the words. IT flowed pretty nice, personally again I am not a fan of multiple scenes in RP's, but that's a personal thing. I'd give the flow and the CD portion of what you did a 7 out of 10 as well. Most of this was because I feel you could have explored so much more of what you were working to get across in the CD portion of the RP. And that there is the fine line, how much is too much? Overall I would say the RP was a solid 7 out of 10, my recommendation is I'd always rather go too far with my thoughts and ideas then risk dialing them back and not going far enough. Thanks Augustine. I dialed back on the second scene simply bc I want to expand on the sibling rivalry in coming weeks. I am going to change Kennedy's color next promo bc it is hard to read.
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