I have absolutely nothing negative to say about this. The only advice I would give is to work on the 'shoot'.
But honestly dude, this fucker got me captivated, it grabbed my attention...it lost my attention a bit at the shoot, but the story was on point.
Work on that shoot, but honestly man, this was great. Creepy and a little bit of humor...
I wish I could give you more, but I really can't. Good job homie.
Now when you say the shoot, do you mean the whole second half or just the multi paragraph rant near the end. Because yeah, the rant part I agree was not as strong as I would have liked it. But what did you think of the Kayla Wincer part?
Edit: Also, is there an RP you would like me to return the feedback for?
Last Edit: Jul 10, 2015 23:10:26 GMT -5 by herbert
Jayson Price: Pretty sure Black set it that nobody new can join. Or at least they can attempt to, but they can't do anything unless it's approved. Which essentially cuts off any guests.
May 23, 2019 19:21:19 GMT -5
The Risen: Shit, I had no idea WCF shut down. I was only here for a few months, but it was a fun few months. Hope y'all are doing well.
Jun 11, 2019 1:55:16 GMT -5