Post by Howard Black on Apr 23, 2015 21:26:16 GMT -5
III: The Only Road
I swear I'll ask for feedback every week! I want to give a big thanks to Joey and Grime for their feedback on last week's RP, and while I doubt I could top something that got me RP of the Week, I hope I entertain!
So far, it has been an absolute joy and a challenge to write for this character. The sort of unintentional, organic heat he acquired and has been slowly trying to shake off has completely flipped the script on what I originally had planned, and I'm trying to make sure it's directly effecting the route of my RPs. I've also found myself in an odd contradiction where some people think my character is a face while others think he's a heel; I'm trying to walk this tightrope and preserve this ambiguity which draws Howard as a well intentioned but prideful guy who has a bad habit of saying the wrong things or keeping his temper/ego in check. Naturally, his colossal victim complex has to keep him mentally out of focus when it comes to discerning friend and foe. This sort of chaotic stance makes it easy for Howard to slide about in morality, but I hope it never becomes too schizophrenic to the point of seeming forced. Believable is the goal I always strive for.
So how am I doing? As per usual, I have a few specific questions for readers:
1) I spent a lot of time working on the shoot. I wrote a bunch of bullet points while in class, went home and improvised a shoot into a tape recorder, transcribed it, edited it, practiced it aloud to my girlfriend a bunch of times, rerecorded it with the revisions, listened to it again, then made further revisions. I'll admit, in my past e-fed experience we could win matches while writing RPs totally irrelevant to the match and not having a shoot, so this is a new process for me. How did I do? What could I focus on improving?
2) I made a deliberate choice to not write the phone call Howard made to his wife and son because I already had a lengthy scene of dialogue between Howard and David; do you think this hurt the RP? Would you have preferred to have read the phone call's transcript or does the description of its effect on Howard in the final segment feel sufficient?
3) Are these RP bookends of "leaving match/beginning match" interesting or feel contrived?
Anything else gladly appreciated and accepted! Thanks for reading!
I swear I'll ask for feedback every week! I want to give a big thanks to Joey and Grime for their feedback on last week's RP, and while I doubt I could top something that got me RP of the Week, I hope I entertain!
So far, it has been an absolute joy and a challenge to write for this character. The sort of unintentional, organic heat he acquired and has been slowly trying to shake off has completely flipped the script on what I originally had planned, and I'm trying to make sure it's directly effecting the route of my RPs. I've also found myself in an odd contradiction where some people think my character is a face while others think he's a heel; I'm trying to walk this tightrope and preserve this ambiguity which draws Howard as a well intentioned but prideful guy who has a bad habit of saying the wrong things or keeping his temper/ego in check. Naturally, his colossal victim complex has to keep him mentally out of focus when it comes to discerning friend and foe. This sort of chaotic stance makes it easy for Howard to slide about in morality, but I hope it never becomes too schizophrenic to the point of seeming forced. Believable is the goal I always strive for.
So how am I doing? As per usual, I have a few specific questions for readers:
1) I spent a lot of time working on the shoot. I wrote a bunch of bullet points while in class, went home and improvised a shoot into a tape recorder, transcribed it, edited it, practiced it aloud to my girlfriend a bunch of times, rerecorded it with the revisions, listened to it again, then made further revisions. I'll admit, in my past e-fed experience we could win matches while writing RPs totally irrelevant to the match and not having a shoot, so this is a new process for me. How did I do? What could I focus on improving?
2) I made a deliberate choice to not write the phone call Howard made to his wife and son because I already had a lengthy scene of dialogue between Howard and David; do you think this hurt the RP? Would you have preferred to have read the phone call's transcript or does the description of its effect on Howard in the final segment feel sufficient?
3) Are these RP bookends of "leaving match/beginning match" interesting or feel contrived?
Anything else gladly appreciated and accepted! Thanks for reading!